All Comments on 'A Summer in the Flesh Ch. 04'

Great read. All of the characters very very believable.

The foundation for the story was amazingly good.

Everything which happened seemed real.

I felt very close to all of the main characters.

She didn't have sex with 15 guys and 2 women while swinging from a trapeze. Other than all of the above, I didn't like it very much! Now hurry up with the shower already!!!!!

CHUCK

and everything flows so smoothly. Is the scene (a beautiful, naked woman with two fully dressed men) possibly what Manet had in mind in his painting "Dejeuner sur l'herbe" (The picnic)?

Keep it up!

COGRATULATIONS. Your story improves with each chapter. Word choices and perfect paces keep your reader tied to the page. THANKS FOR SHARING

Holy cow that was a hot chapter. Your writing is very good, maybe a bit flowery but still good. You could use a good editor. You can’t edit it yourself because your brain will fill in missing words and self correct spelling errors. I loved the strip tease while watching herself in the window. The two guys pleasuring her at the same time was amazing. I can’t wait for what’s next. Exciting !5-😊😊😊😊😊’s