by Skidder
Ah you didn't keep it in the same tense through the whole story, there was at least one paragraph where you wrote "She looks" which conflicts with the origian; writing of the story. Have someone proof read next time.
I'm also a fan of d & d and most of my writings are set in the Forgotten Realms. I've been a long time gamer and enjoy reading others stories set in the same setting. The concept of one twin being a half demon and the other a half celestial is quite interesting. Not sure how that would work, though. Still interesting....
I am a fan of forgoten realms and it is my d&d setting. Me and my dm discuse things like this and how half breeds can happen. I think it wold be a interesting if you have an other story about her having twins one a half demon and one a half celestial. Looking forword to reading more of your work.