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Click here"Can I touch you?" I asked as she pulled away from me. A smirk rose on her face as we looked in each other's eyes.
"Hmm... not today baby.." She said before giving me a little kiss on the cheek and moving away from me. I watch her get off the couch and stood up to stretch. I stood up with her and bent over to reach for my panties. I feel a soft smack on my ass that caused me to squeal. As I turned around, she still had that smirk glued to her face.
I rolled my eyes and turned back around to grab my panties and put them on, doing the same thing with my pants.
"Well... I'll take my leave. Tell him I left early." I said while pulling my joggers up and adjusting my pants.
"Sure thing cutie. I hope we can do this again sometime." She said.
"Yeah... again.. sure..." I told her as I turned towards the door to unlock it.
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Fun concept, keep practicing and find an editor. Literotica has a pool of volunteer educators who can help you if you don't have anyone else. Also try reading it to yourself out loud, that can help.
Nice idea, but amateurish writing brings it down (confusion of present and past tense narration... that can't be a deliberate stylistic thing, can it?)
...conceit, which is the essential, but you need to get someone you trust, a real life friend or possibly a mentor to read and advise (either editing or just proof reading). There were a lot of small grammatical errors. They happen and aren't a problem in a draft, but they would be picked up by another pair of eyes and should be dealt with before publishing. Looking forward to more from you. Good luck.
Nice first effort. Some of the dialogue was a bit choppy but a nice twist on the plot. Looking forward to seeing more from you.