All Comments on 'A Virgin Boy with Dominating Maami Ch. 01'

Excellent narration keep going especially armpit fetish make it more erotic

Found this very difficult you read.

Mama and Mami are confusing to readers of English stories.

The tempo was almost a snail's pace

Could not finish reading.

From a reader's pov, there's isn't much to appreciate except about your efforts. It didn't even fit in fetish category for now.

Yeah, you've created the plot but it's so short that doesn't count as story.

Plot is good and story can be awesome but you've to write bigger parts.

Good luck for that.

Good going... 5 star narration ...

Would wait for the next part in the series.

Thanks bro for your appreciation. It gets more naughty from here.

Build is good but all depends on next part..To get more readers

Good foundation bro. Can’t wait for next part. May be little more erotic content in next part. You didn’t describe the physical appearance of main character (mami) but her fragrance only. May be elaborate on physical attributes in next part

Hey Ishaan, happy to help with the editing and improving the grammar. Let me know. This could build up into something good. My suggestion would be to have one plot in one story. There was no plot in this one. Perhaps adding more improve the richness.

waiting for the next part