All Comments on 'A Walk in the Park Ch. 01'

Good start. For me, I wish you'd marked the change of POV between him and her with more than a paragraph break. Without dialogue, impossible here, a clear flag of the POV change would help, I think.

Will look out for Ch.2.

Couldn't you have given some thought to giving it a bit of credibility? Masturbating men and women fill the parks of the world, do they? Other park users keep their distance, even during hot and sunny lunchtime periods?

A great start to a story. Hope you will finish it soon.

This story is credible despite the other comment. Not all parks are crowded, and I have seen some surprising things over the years.

Well written, I'll be back for more