by eddie_winter
And the teasing of him is good, but not great. It's over too fast.
And there could have been lots more of it -- touching and playing with his cock, certainly, but more talking, forcing him to put into words what he dreamed of her doing to him, for example.
And rather than just stop, when he said he'd lose control and cum, she could have ordered him not to cum and continued the cock manipulation.
And eating her to three orgasms is fine, but simply saying that it happened isn't erotic. How it happened is what we needed to hear. Step by step.
Did she want to get fingered while she was being eaten? Did her breasts get any action? Her ass?
So much could have been done that wasn't.
Gave it four stars for potential.