All Comments on 'ABC Modeling Company Pt. 04'

Gave it 5 stars. But I got a little confused. What did Ricky get for saying the baby was his? And why did the pilots get cash - for a suggestion? Doesnt make sense. Otherwise, great read.

and this was perfect.

Great story, wonderful characters, marvelous sex scenes. But it needed an end so new stories could be found on the site. I had a great time reading this and all your others here on Lit. Thanks, now please get back to work on Three Sisters.

One more chapter soon and then I have several more stories coming. I will get back to the Three Wicked Sisters.

5 stars - and i wish i could give it more. i'm looking forward to the next chapter!!!

I don't believe an ending is needed soon, I see more to this story then just one or two more chapters. Maybe even a Prequel chapter or two to explain the parents in more depth. Oh and yes I gave 5 stars,

Just as an example, look at the first sentence of your closing paragraph: Beth and I attack (present tense verb) Ron and we had (past tense verb) a wild night in bed until we wear (present tense verb) Ron out. In this example, you mix present tense and past tense verbs. A better read would be: Beth and I attacked Ron, and we had a wild night in bed, until we wore Ron out.

I advise that you get an editor (or a better one) to make your stories more readable.

Hello Kitty BDSM toys. OMG - brilliant!!!! Love this series and that was a masterful addition, so to speak. Literally laughed out loud.

I have been enjoying the series so far. While fantastical, it has been fairly well written. But this chapter seems cobbled together with duct tape, trite stereotypes and macho bullshit - and then phoned in.

The opening “terrorist attack” tried to be Ludlum, but as written by a CPA. What’s the point of selecting a battle that sounds more like a tea party?

And the dungeon? I’ve never read a more vanilla BDSM scene. Given that he can’t leave welts on models, there are so many delightful punishments for Ana that wouldn’t leave a mark. Ever heard of nipple clamps? Forced orgasms? Pussy whips? Orgasm denial? And many more truly unmentionable punishments? Hell, the average married couple has probably done more and never even thought they were very kinky.

Hoping for more in the next chapter.