All Comments on 'About Me'

Unconventional ... both setting and language ... might be very enticing if more conventional English readers like me could make more sense of it. A good editing job from someone with an open and fresh mind would definitely help.

Looking forward to next revision / story part.

It seems quite likely that English is the author’s second language, it takes guts to post an erotic story in a language where you are not completely fluent. The volunteer editors on this site are great, take advantage of their help to clean this up a bit and improve the flow.