All Comments on 'Absurdly Slutty Hand Job'

From the first paragraph I struggled to understand your 'story'. What is cis? Your use of English seems very poor. Try again but get an editor to help you.

The pretentiousness detracts from the comprehensibility ...

OK... So you used a plethora of unusual and rarely-used or even heard words to impress us with your vocabulous inventory.. I am soo impressed I think I will now go and enjoy a bowel movement...!!

A load of gobshite

"...reassembled my right leg..."

What, you were falling apart?

Never, never lower your vocabulary or style format for some imagined audience. I'll enjoy reading your next story.

In the off chance this isn't a parody, please attempt to learn the proper use of the vocabulary you are using. Using "sophisticated" multisyllabic words does not guarantee a different, more elegant writing style. Your use of vocab and sentence construction is clunky and slow to read through. If you are serious about improving I recommend talking to people and getting an editor that can help readability.

Additionally you have gained these viewer numbers through applying to the nude day competition and getting on the list. Unfortunately, your story has nothing to do with the nude day theme and should not be among them.

I hope this ropey start does not put you off writing but please, get some assistance in improving, read plenty to understand the use of words and don't submit stories to competitions unless you are dedicated to the theme.

Was this intentional?