by magmaman
I liked the clean concise writing, no over discribing your dick our thier breasts. Keep writing, your doing better then some people who post here with grammer and spelling that hurts the eyes when reading.
You are a better writer than 'Anonymous from California', who made 6 grammatical and spelling errors in his two sentence critique. Geez, the would be teacher can't even get it right, even though his thoughts are relevant.