All Comments on 'Action, Reaction and Consequences Ch. 05'

Brilliant story. Thank you.

ecboy, thanks, your one single comment makes the hours of figuring the plot then put it into into words worthwhile.

Really enjoyed it so far! I hope Matt finds someone new, too many bridges burnt, but that's just me!

Personally I don't like multiple endings, because you can't unread and ignore the ones you don't like! Look forward to the next chapter though.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ It's been an interesting story. But as you indicated, you've written Matt and Tanya into a corner. I'm not a writer, hated having to do so in education days. But Tanya is a whore to the world now, how could he take her back? Some closure with an acrid theme seems to be the only realistuic end for them. How could there be a friendly ending the way she shit on their marriage. And let's be realistic. The kind of work potentially required for that role could be toxic enough to leave her barren with regards to children.

Baldy74, glad you've enjoyed the ride so far. The seed for this story has been with me for over a year, it's a mind boggling controversial story, a search for 'Bob Lambert undercover police officer' will show you where the seed came from. It's the coming parts that dig into the real story.

It was over this summer where I started to think how it could be used to write a (hopefully!) engaging story in several parts. I thought I'd be able to do it by creating mini-stories and threading enough of the previous chapters in to the next to make it all seem relevant without starting at the beginning but that's come unstuck in the later ones. Lesson learnt.

It is my first attempt at making something of a reasonable size with what I consider is a complex plot and I can honestly say I've done my best to make as much believable in this fictitious world as I can. I took me several days to figure out how to transition through for Tanya to hold a sexual secret from Matt with the potential to destroy them.

Some things take a lot of thought how to portray them. An example is I used drugging but rather than simply have a single incident where everyone's too dim to see it I opted for the two photo sessions with the first being a very low dose that wouldn't be obvious. I tried to give it credence by bringing in the water dispenser with the lime infused water to hide it's cloudiness - it actually came to me in a meeting I attended trying to unlock the transition and that's exactly what the had as a dispenser. Bingo! Found a way to progress forward. Of course, some of our Literoticans weren't happy, pointing out that in real life she would likely have been wary of the water and, at worse, a full blood toxicology would have taken place immediately after she was back at base. If i try to make it too real it'll be very short because neither Matt or Tanya's traumatic upbringings allied to carefully mental scrutiny before being employed would be soooo short.

"Matt and Tanya failed to get into their dream professions after failing the interview progress so Matt ended up working in a warehouse and Tanya became a shop manager. The end" :)

Sorry I've digressed. I understand your concerns about alternative endings. As much as you'll follow the one you would like to see, human curiosity will inevitable lead to reading through the other. I'll really have to put my thinking cap on.

Shifting forward all the characters return, we will open with the point, and concentrate on, Tanya after she walked through the door at the Airport with the two French Interpol Officers and run through her story until she ends up back in the UK at the funeral.

A bit of a spoiler alert a new character is going to turn up 'Two Gun Micky" which will change the dynamic of the story (I hope). Matt may no longer love Tanya but it doesn't mean he's forgotten about her or care about her well being once it's revealed where she's ended up. Enjoy Christmas, I'm trying to finish a smaller story that's bugging me to get it released then I'll be back full tilt. With a bit of luck, next chapter out midish January

INKENT

6King, thank's for the feedback, I appreciate a thinking persons perspective on the story. I would be mad to just run through the same scenario as earlier regarding their relationship.

Not sure if it's played out for the readers as I hoped it would but in CH01 we have an immature needy young man with what's considered his first real love, even though he's about to fuck up a marriage. At the end of this CH05 he realizes it's over so moves on without totally falling apart via some maturity on his part unlike CH01.

Shifting forward have a look the response to Baldy74's comment. Not fully worked out the way forward but the bulk of the detail is in my mind ready to roll.

Greetings. I see that I have missed chapters 2,3, and 4. I gave chap 1 five stars, but I missed 2 and 3 because they were in different categories. I probably skipped 4 because too much time had passed for me to recognize it. In the future, you may get more views if you keep all the chapters in the same category and post on shorter intervals. Personally, I would rather read one long story all at once. I guess my short-term memory is getting weak.

Let her rip!

HI VeracityHeterodyne, thanks for taking the time to respond. Apologies if you've not been able to follow in sequence, lesson learnt in that respect.

I've read a few stories in the past where people have bitched about a story not being true to the sub genre so my logic was to write in a fashion of making each chapter a story in it's own right by building sufficient detail into subsequent chapters so that you could, if desired, skip the need to read the earlier chapters but that all unravelled as it's delved deeper into the story. Again, lesson learnt.

With regards publishing when complete, I have to balance my opportunity to write and wish to see work published against publishing in one hit as a complete series. I know me, and if I tried to assemble it all, I'm to impatient as I have an ever growing list of work 'in progress' and are likely to drift off.

One pet hate though, is to read something to find it just stops, never to be completed. I'll ensure I'll get to publish whole works even over a slightly protracted time frame.

Wow!! As a happy ending type of guy my initial reaction is a way for Tanya and Matt to reconnect but not quite sure how you could pull it off, Same for Matt and Ann, so will just wait to see where you take us !

You cannot please everyone! Ignore the bitchers!

VeracityHeterodyne, the haters provide me with my morning coffee chiuckle :)

I gotta say, more than just Tanya going off in her own for a year, the fact that she stood by and let Matt have his head smashed against the table and then let him being drugged... If you have him end up back with her, you'll be putting him back with a physical abuser and gaslighted. Please don't fucking do that.

Go the route I think you're going, have him get back with Ann. If she's turned a new leaf and done her penance for betraying Lance she deserves a new chance too. Matt and her could be happy together.

The idea of Matt and Tanya getting back together now is just unconscionable. that degree of betrayal both mental and physical is just horrific.

King_MacAulay, yes you're quite right. I've dug the story into a hole with regards Matt and Tanya's relationship. If I'm lazy I could do it by just regurgitating their relationship as it played out before but I don't want the readers to feel robbed by a lack of effort on my part. I 'm confident I can keep a relationship viable right until the end, but not as we've seen to date.

You're a perceptive individual King_MacAulay, Ann's coming back but I'm hoping to make that a little more than rekindling what existed by adding a distinct twist. I won't go further, but I'm hoping you'll enjoy it when we get there, please let me know what you think once it appears on Literotica.

As an author I appreciate people like you hanging in here! Thanks

INKENT

Don't cop out with the choose your own adventure ending. I don't see any way he could reconcile with her after this.

Matt had one or two unpleasant experiences with "Mr. Smith and Mr. Jones". He should expect a future run in with them as he knows Tanya's assignment will last up to a year, possibly a bit longer since they don't have a hard schedule in stone. Matt should take his holidays in the USA with a plan to prevent Lance or his boss from getting the drop on him again. I would get fricking tired of some asshole slamming my head into a table. Matt could take advanced firearms combat training coupled with advanced self defense courses. The last could be taken back in England as well.

The next time Lance tries a cheap shot Matt can turn the table literally and pound Lance's head in with a table leg. He has it coming. Face it, the real reason Tanya was recruited was because Lance is paying Matt back for Ann. Tanya is collateral damage and neither Lance or his boss gives a crap. It will end up that Tanya is getting banged by the foreign target of their operation AND "Smith and Jones" as well.

Come on, pull Matt out of the swamp! In chapter one he screwed up with Ann, but he got his act together and has been sincere about living as a faithful family man. I don't even care if you do a RAAC with Tanya and Matt. That's fine with me. But don't let the two jerks get the best of Matt and then walk off in the sunset toasting with a cold brew! That would ruin a story that has grown interesting.

Not worth the wait till xmas vacations are over. Au revoir!

I don't see how they can be together after all this

4 pages of a story that has now lost its charm. One can see that the writer is off his line and has allowed the story to control him and not the other way around.its like a non ending soap opera…

Time to switch offf!

Ok, now I have to say, I really enjoy this one. In it's unbelievability it's close to some of AndyHm stories, but also written just as good. Thank you for this, looking forward to read more

Yeah this better not end in Tanya and Matt getting back together. She's lied, let him be assaulted, then allowed him to be drugged so he could be conned into signing an agreement so she could fuck around all in the name of her job. She's not worth the time or effort and deserves some form of payment for her deception.

So did they remove her tattoo? 🤔

The writing is far more controlled than Chapter 1 and the story certainly progressed well. Of course, you have written Matt as a very ignorant, naive, immature arsehole. Not particularly bright. So his actions do fit in with that. No way a "normal" person would have carried on the way he did. Oh, also, no way that a senior Officer like Graham would have sided, even as a friend, with Matt and broken his responsibilities passing on info to moron Matt.

Matt should have also sold/disposed of the rings PLUS all of Tanya's possessions should have been disposed of, not stored. Wedding photos destroyed etc. She no longer exists, remember!

Next, Matt needs to talk with some independent Financial Advisers regarding getting off-shore tax haven accounts. Don't be a dick and do it through his normal Bank! "Whoever gives, can take it away".

Eventually, Tanya will return (If still alive and not a fucked out, drugged out, pregnant shell) and might want her life back, even under a new name. Dumbo Matt needs to sort himself out and possibly get into another relationship and marry. Why not? He is now single. Ann????

I know from my background, what PM sections can do re "Black Ops" and accountability. All that stuff with terminating, does happen BUT not like these goons. Also, the Brits are notoriously cheap with expenses so destroying an entire restaurant and its owner etc, then throwing money around everywhere simply would not happen. Budgets, my man!

Good read. I would love to see the two reconcile. Since the record of their marriage has been erased. They could remarry to begin again. Realistically MATT Knows her line of work so mission’s shouldn’t be a surprise to him. Your writing emphasizes her commitment to him and her country. That commitment should be rewarded by reunification with the one she loves.

Loving the series so far. The only thing im mad about is having to wait till after christmas to see where things go. Keep up the good work!

Great story. Don't see any way back for her. The disrespect, drugging, letting her "spy" friends slap him around. Expecting him to put up with being second to whatever she wants including having sexual relations to do her job. She certainly has become the best she can be; "a top class whore for the government", way to go.

You’re the author. As you progress with the story the/your ending will become obvious. Write it and be done.

Inkent this is one helluva story! 5*. Very intriguing and patiently awaiting further chapters. I agree with the comments of keeping them in one category. Go with your gut and when you get to final conclusion let it ride. I would not provide an alternate ending. Thank you for all the effort you put into this project.

Great story, it has me spellbound. It could become as popular as February, if it doesn’t ye run to long. Keep up the good writing.

I hope he Will dump her and be happy with a woman who loves him. His current wife cannot really love him and treat him like that. She drugs him, let him be beaten and she rapes him. Let her be the best and let him move without hr.

This begs for a finish.⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

TK

Firstly, loving the story, pit’s well written and interesting enough to keep you involved and to sir your emotions.

The last two chapters were darker, darker on this last one and you’ve got to feel for Matt on his journey from being a selfish immature character to the stronger one he’s becoming on the journey.

But, and I know it’s your story,,your parting comment about bringing them back together?? There’s really no realistic way given everything that’s happened that Matt would end up back with Tanya. Nobody is that lacking in self esteem or character to go back to a Roman that been revealed as a true narcissist, with slightly delusional thought processes and questionable morals.

Yes, she got sympathy for being drugged and sexually assaulted in part 4, but as soon after as the party she was meeting Mr’s Smith and Jones and arranging to use that experience to further her career.

She saw how Matt reacted when he thought she’d willingly cheated,,left immediately and told her divorce was on the cards. So she knows he won’t accept her taking an undercover job where she will be asked to do the same or more, this time willingly and consciously. But she agreed any way.

She knew Matt was angry about her lying to him the first time and told him she’d never do it again but she has time and time again.

She abandoned him straight into their holiday, left him to handle his Grams death. (Was that death natural or was she helped along to distract Matts attention away from Tanya?)

Then she sets him up at the restaurant, watches has he’s beaten and doesn’t protest or step in to help him. Sees him threatened with death and agrees to drug him to get his compliance. Then, let’s not underplay this or wash over it, she rapes him and photos are taken. And yes, he’s drugged and unable to make a conscious decision about sex and given his anger with Tanya he would never have consented to sex with her so it’s rape. The fact he’s a man and she’s his wife does not change that. If the shoe was on the other foot no one would dispute it, bit Male rape and sexual assault is still largely ignored even on this time of equality.

She’s left him with a contract to allow her to cheat but in the expectation she’ll come back in a year and all will be forgotten and forgiven, despite it being written in to allow for her having a baby by someone else.

No way does any sane person go back to a deranged person like this. If it’s heading that way I’ll bail before the end.

You say Lance and Anne will return, Lance is in security bit although they made peace their not exactly friends but they have a connection through Anne and Lance did feel guilty for being overly cruel when denying her reconciliation.

So… Matt ends up in hospital having been attacked when he digs a bit, meets Anne again at the hospital and they slowly pick back up. It gets back to Tanya has Matts being watched carefully and being delusional and psychotic she asks Smith and Jones to take care of her.

Lance and Matt meet up at the funeral and feeling guilty and angry at the death of his ex wife joins Matt in revealing the plot or gaining revenge.

Also a big no to Tanya coming back pregnant, dying and leaving Matt to raise her cuckold child when she dies.

Sorry your story, just some thoughts and opinions.

I’ll look forward to the next part

Hey Inkent, love, love your story so far-I really hope to read in the next chapters, with all the shit that Matt

has taken both emotionally and physically that he could exert some revenge on Mr.Smith & Jones-you know a little payback. Even though Mr S&J are psychotics, Matt could team up with two gun Micky and come up with

something, after all you keep saying this is fiction so fiction it up and make those fuckers hurt-throw out all logic

and have Matt dominate S&J-because revenge tastes oh so sweet.....

I don't think it was clear how the Grandmother died-what was the cause of her death(maybe I missed it?)

I'm from Canada so your English English drives me crazy, I don't know what's going on(what is a spanner?)lol

I noticed you kept the tea brewing to only once in this chapter, last chapter I think there was someone in every

paragraph drinking the stuff-starting with Gran, wow could she brew and drink(come to think of it maybe this was a cause of her death-(death by tea)-Just funning ya, Kent .

When I got to where M learned about Gran's death, my radio was playing River by Joni Mitchell not that insipid

version by Robert Downey and that song coupled with M's anguish over losing the only two women in his life really opened the tear ducts for awhile(thought of my mom passing in Jan.)

I enjoy HEA endings but I really can't see M and T together again, I mean she just sat there while Mr J/S was

slamming M's face first onto the table TWICE! She has made her choice and why does she think that M would

be waiting for her after a year of absence and doing only God knows what and with whom and how many times.

She must be somewhat delusional.

They say once bitten twice shy-what do they say about twice bitten? Poor Matt

I think you write conflict very well-the back and forth between M&A and M&T was expressed exceptionally well.

I could really feel M's anger and his partners sorrow and desperation in their pleadings to Matt.

If Tan comes back, she will come back broken and will Matt be there to pick up the pieces???

Will wait til mid Jan for the next excellent instalment-no pressure mid Jan you promised!

As you can tell-I like your saga.

Dario

Mr. Jones and Smith die when Matt puts a contract out on them. They find out too late to stop the contract. Tanya figures out Jones and Smith using her for their own gain not hers and comes back to Matt

I hope this doesn't lead to Matt Taking Tanya back. She doesn't love him at least not as much as her job and no justification is going to give her a pass for becoming a government sanctioned whore. I don't know where you'll be taking her part of the story but she deserves some pain for her lies and allowing Matt to be assaulted and drugged. Keep up the good work.

for a recommendation/idea Mr. Smith dies and there is all sorts of trouble to bring Tanya back into existence and the whole thing gets exposed. Our hero helps Tanya but there is no more relationship, he ends up happy with the PM's daughter/niece who he meets while working in London and again when helping straighten out Tanya's issues.

Please only one ending. BTB

I've really been enjoying your work. Thank you! I am sad to see the path Tanya's taken though. It seems she has become a villain, at least in relation to Matt and her marriage. Can I ask, do you see an overall happy ending or a sad one for this story? I am not trying to get heavy spoilers, just trying to ascertain what to expect. Thank you again for all of your hard work on this. Happy Holidays! :)

Whisky; Tango; Foxtrot

The only interest I have in Tanya is to see her lose everything she values. I hope her mission is an absolute failure and she whored herself for absolutely nothing. I hope the two losers she allowed to harm her husband are destroyed in ways that can't be written about here.

You've turned her into an irredeemable character I'm afraid.

BTW, it was really cute how she lured him in to be assaulted by her friends who drugged him and then she raped him.

I'm hoping you have the understanding that no one is really untouchable and for every Ying there is a Yang.

Smith and Jones have e reconning coming (Tanya as well) and I'm positive that there is someone that has their number.

At this point I don't honestly see a way Matt makes it out alive. He has shown that this level of disrespect is a deal breaker so I don't see him taking Tanya back after this. When she returns and he doesn't take her back are we to believe that a woman who will drug and rape a man will take no for an answer? Not to mention the unhinged thug they have working for the secret police, who has already shown he thinks violence is the first step not the last. I feel for Matt but his death would at least bring Tanya back to earth. Maybe this story is headed for a "no one wins" ending.

when tanya comes back, i'd like matt to kick her ass to the curb

LoL! I misspelled yin. Terrible head cold. Merry Christmas!

Pushed them hard is an understatement.

There's no way he would want her back. She can keep pushing him around with her muscle, but it's clear he actively hates her guts. If she loves him, at all, she'd let him go. But she's too selfish. She'll keep using drugs, blackmail, muscle to force a man that wants her gone. It's basically rape at this point. She's become toxic, it's evolved from tunnel vision into something way worse. I just want this man to live his life in peace. And she's just chaos incarnate. Nothing good left about her, except maybe the results of her work.

She could have left him behind. The rape, the drugging, the threats were all just extra. Shows how far she's fallen as a person.

Why would she go back to him? Considering he treated her just as shabbily and declared he wasn’t in love with her. What “Counselling” is going to fix the fact that their marriage is over because in the end: he wasn’t in love with her, he was in lust.

There are countless undercover operations and all of them require caution, secrecy and understanding on the part of the spouse. Because if something goes wrong, the undercover agent, the spouse and their extended family is at risk and Matt acted liked a spoiled child, demanding his wife drop everything like she was at a conference instead of in a situation where she could die!

He could have gotten her killed and at no point t did he care about her, only that he needed her to support him because his grandmother died! SHE COULD HAVE DIED AND HE DIDNT SEEM TO CARE!

SO YEAH, stop making this about Matt, show us how Tanya feels about her husband putting her life in jeopardy because ge was butt hurt. Show us why Matt is allowed to be a firefighter hero but his wife needs to be a trophy wife.

She deserves better than Matt.

I find this story interesting. I think Tanya has given all her rights to be married to Matt. To much disrespect for him to forgive. The only people that should be killed off should be the two Smith and Jones.

You can go so many different ways that it will be interesting. Your story but I hope you will allow other authors like Saddle tramp to give his take. Tanya have a lot to lose two much. She has erased herself from him Maybe she should come up with aids or super gonorrhea where there is no cure. Great story can’t wait to read what you come up with

MAke Tanya have a kid, and the only way mat will take her back is to get rid of it. So for the rest of her life she will feel Matt's pain of loss.

Firstly, its my birthday today and what a great gift you've given me. My heartfelt thanks for taking the time to read my work, then using your own precious time to comment. Honestly

means a lot to me.

The story that I wanted to tell from the seed of my imagination is now about to be told in the last part, it will not span no more than three chapters at best. All that's been written to date were developments to help see who the characters are flaws and all.

I think of writing ike cooking. I decide what kind of meal I want to cook, gather up all the ingredients before prepping them as the pan heats up. Once I start I'll inevitably add or takeaway some ingredients, even decide to grill and not fry a piece of the meal.

Like that meal, Tanya and Matt have been cooked too far to undo where I've taken them but....just but....

The frying pan of this story is bubbling away. There's one more piece to add and next time around you'll meet "Two Gun Mickey" ; We'll then have everything now cooking towards the end.

It can't have an "and they all lived happily ever after" ending but I don't want to create an ending that's a bitter one, at least in entirely. Heck, like many of you all I want to make sure that Smith and Jones get what we feel they deserve :)

I've a clear enough path except for choosing which of the scenes in my head will be the very ending but, like the story to date, as I keep writing it'll become clear to me.

In the comments someone mentioned other authors having a go at certain chapters or sections. I'm all for that as it let's me have a read but all I ask is let me finih it first before offering alternatives.

Back soon

FiNKENT

Tea! Cups of tea! Some of you picked up my over zealous use of cups of tea, particularly in scenes with Matt's gran.

Forgive me that's strictly English humour, in films throughout post WWIi when the going get tough...make a pot of tea. It was a cheeky nod on my part to those times, so my humble apologies to you transaltic and European cousins as the humour wasn't tuned for your wavelength 😀

FiNKENT

Well written. I don't understand the hate for Matt, Tanya literally in her ambition to be 'the best' is playing with fire that not only can burn her but get Matt killed. The two goons she is playing with works kill Matt without thinking. As written I don't know how Tanya and Matt could reconcile. If she was honest with him, told him as much as she loved him she needed to see if she could be the best , and understand she was asking the impossible if him and divorce him.

She tries to have it all, she wants to play super agent and then have him as well,she expects him to sit and wait a year and take her back. Among other things, power junkies like her are never satisfied, she will do this then want to do the next thing. They would have a kid, and then guess what, she would disappear again. If she divorced him , at that point she is telling him she understands,and walks away. If she does that, sets him free, if she later decides he is worth more than her job, and comes back, it would be her making the decision to toss off being an agent,rather than the game she is playing.

You have painted them into a corner, which to me is a challenge to overcome if you want them to reconcile, as an author that is a lot harder than BTB. Way I see it:

1) Smith and jones sell her out, and she ends up being the sex slave to whoever Mr Big is, you could really go to town on her, make the BTB really over the top ( heck make mr big a evil,sexy dyke who breaks Tanya ...). Smith&Jones terminated with prejudice after being tortured.

2)Tanya is killed, but before she is she leaves Matt this long video confession if how much she loved him, but her ambitions & the thrill of using all her skills overcame that. She also sends to Graham info on the highly illegal things Smith and jones were doing & they end up with a grisly end.

3) Tanya comes back but she looks totally different and she has no memory of Matt ( amnesia induced by drugs). He doesn't recognize her at all. She is working London, has a created past. She runs into Matt at a bar, and they hit it off and fall in love. Eventually Matt realizes it may be Tanya and he is torn, but he realizes that this new person is not really Tanya, that is all gone, the ambition, etc.

4) Tanya comes back, Matt is with someone else and she realizes it is over. She tries to get Matt back but realizes she blew that apart with her ambition. She also realizes that the mission she threw it all away for in the end wasn't even that big a deal in the scheme of things. She gets her revenge on Smith&Jones, blows the door off the operation &goes into witness protection.

5) they do try to reconcile. Matt Realizes that he had a role in what happened bc he didn't put his foot down earlier ,that he had to come first. Tanya makes amends for her ambition, she not only quits but burns bridges with her past where there is no way she can go back. She has a bunch of confidential information that could send a lot of ppl to jail or being terminated, that if she disappears or is killed will be sent to intelligence agencies all over the world..She also makes very clear that she can never really make up what happened to her. One thing she shows him is video of Smith and jones being gruesomely tortured& killed for what they did to Matt.

Truly. reconciliation at this point is IMPOSSIBLE you have turned her into a lying obsessive , cheating cunt that NO man would ever in his right mind take back.

Next best thing is to kill Tanya off whilst saving Matt from Smith and Jones. Make it so she kills them as well as herself. To tie up the loose ends.

Then bring Ann his first true love back into the picture, let Lance bring her to Matt.

With Tanya’s death and exit from the story, Matt and Ann are able to rekindle their undying love and ride off into the sunset together.

How about that for a wrap up ??

So did they kill granny to get him off the scene ? Unless one of the ladies comes back into his life, just for him to reject them or a new woman appears on the horizon then the story has ended right there.

Well happy birthday!

There is no happy ending after this, unless you want to force it through with a way where you insult the intelligence of your own readers. You set up a situation where there is no way out in that regards, the MC got cornered, he can't go to the police because it's the upper echelons of the government that fucked with him. The wife became completely delusional and could only keep him locked up after she's done with her so called mission, otherwise he hates her so much he couldn't stay near a feet of her. Unless the whole thing turns out to be unsanctioned, or gets out in the public and they want plausible deniability and deems the wife and her new boss rouge elements, then they can get away with it all. The only way to end this where you can satisfy both the readers and the MC can get a little bit of justice, is that when they return, he pulls out a gun, shots himself in the head, and on the same day, the entire story of how he was fucked over gets out to every major news outlet in the country, therefore ruining the wife and her boss as well, upon the fact that she has to see him killing himself because of her actions. Nice corner you managed to get yourself into.

Wargamer, thanks again for taking the time to comment. As a sane people there is no way Matt and Tanya can reconnect but...what if we have one or two characters that have serious personality flaws due to traumatic events earlier in their life that have been able to lie fairly dormant and almost undetected until certain events trigger the change? It's a possible path this may follow :)

Of course, there is Ann from C01 who is going to reappear in Matt's life but I'm hoping to make it interesting. It certain isn't going to be bump into her in a bar and rekindle their relationship. With 'Two Gun Mickey' coming on stage left plus throw in Ann's ex Lance, who's shown he can be quite an incendiary person, things are going to heat up.

Im hoping to get to the end in two more chapters but njlauren's comments that precede yours have allowed me to find a piece of development I'm missing and that's to develop Mssrs Smith & Jones. I'm now planning to take a suggested character development for one of the others and use it for Mr Smith. Thanks njlauren!!

INKENT

Good story. He needs to stick by his guns and leave her for good . A twist is she returns pregnant and tries to get him back but he forces a dna test and it’s no his . Most men would never be able to stay with an undercover spy type , even just law enforcement. Many have to do to much to prove themselves in their situation with possible doing drugs or fucking and that is for both men and women. It’s not a life for married people

EZ8lt, thanks for taking the time to comment. I have two distinct endings that I'm looking at. The last thing I want to do is insult those that have invested their time in reading this story and will press my brain and writing skills hard to make the ending plausible based on the characters involved and the final pieces of development for them. When we get to the end, by all means let me know if you think it's been done.

INKENT

Anonymous, no his gran did die of natural causes. I need Matt to be able to move on from his current location into London plus he needs to be vulnerable due to the loss of his gran & Tanya as it all unfolds. Thanks for the comment!

INKENT

How can a loving wife watch her husband get manhandled by government thugs and expect him to wait at least a year for her ass to return? The capper is havibg him drugged to coerce his approval. Such disrespect for their marriage just to prove she's the best is ridicilous. Let Matt move on and find someone else. Besides, what's to say Tanya won't pull the same stunt should it present itself in the future? She's proven repeatedly that her word means shit.

Thoroughly enjoyable read...look forward to your next. 5*

Thank you Tegge, glad you're enjoying the ride!

INKENT

I like your story and writing. Those are two likable characters even if at some they both had errors of judgment. Is it the path to follow? Honestly, i’m also a bit lost of where it should go as i read it. The last abuses are major hurdles. I see them together but ut will be a tough win to get for her. Thanks for writing and sharing

QBikk glad you're enjoying it, hopefully as much as I'm crafting all the pieces that make up this sorry tale. I say sorry the very nature of its content is pointing to trouble, bigger than we've seen so far ahead.

I'm confident that at least one character will emerge at the end in an acceptable place for the audience. The question is, who?

INKENT

A very powerful and engrossing story. Unlike many readers, I don't enjoy trying to predict how a tale will end, let alone telling an author how they should do it. I will look forward eagerly to reading the rest of this one.

Thanks, ohio

ohio, thanks for the kind words, glad it's providing an entertaining read for you. I promise I'm going to pull all the stops out as we head towards the finish!

Tayna's archillies heel is her delusion that she and Mat are in love. She is insane, as in lost touch with reality.

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Let this be a major reason why S&J are killed

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Matt does not need to be aware of what she did, or anything about the operation. His new world need never intersect Tayna or her job or former department.

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Lance is in the security field; your new not yet introduced character sounds SAS like; let them be part of S&J downfall.

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It looks like S&J are operationally incompetent. For example they have no one covering their rear in all the meetings we've seen them in and are vulnerable.

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Perhaps Ann gets together with Matt and tries to free him from his past with Tayna so enlists Lance who takes pity having known Matt and Tayna's old police buddy becomes aware of them as his group is to keep track of tangently related people to Tayna's past at the order of S&J.

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He then helps Lance et. al. to sting S&J then finds Tayna spit out and crushed. She can't be repaired, but he wants to atone.

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Georgina's death could be S&J clipping connections with knowledge of Tayna and Matt's shared knowledge, in which case Matt should have been killed too, but Tonya bargained for him. It could have been truly natural causes.

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Tonya is inserted as a concubine; is expected to / does get pregnant, eventually enslaved. You need not redeem her; your call. BTB.

ReadyOne, thanks for the comments the colander of where we can go is full of ideas although I've set the stall out for the ending although some of the comments have most definitely been useful for character development. On that note part six has gone in today for review post publishing. I said we were going to go back to the point where Tanya walked away from Matt at Lyon airport but the commentary over the last few days had let me to ramp up on some character development that will ease us nicely into Tanya life once she stepped through the door at the airport and chose her job over Matt. I've just started to put together part 07 which I'm hoping brings us back to the point where Matt is working and living in London and we get see what Tanya's immediate future looks like, post part 07. BTB....a possibility...but there again.........

INKENT

Definitely a thriller ! Well done and looking forward to the ending

jblogs, glad you're enjoying the ride! Part 06 is in for publishing so hopefully released within next couple of days. Slight departure from previous chapters but it points the way forward :)

The story requires an enormous suspension of disbelief, but if the reader is prepared to do so then it is intriguing and well written (can't say that it's "good" because Tanya is such a cunt that I hate her; please, do NOT have Matt get back together with her). My preferred ending will be that Matt finds a happy life and children with another woman (Ann?), Tanya is utterly ruined emotionally, financially, legally and physically, and if someone has to die (and I agree, someones needs to die), it is Mr Smith and Mr Jones who will turn out to have been running an operation off the reservation. Matt gets some revenge but the main instrument will be Lance, who is plainly a former SAS operator, and some of his colleagues. Death is too good for Tanya, however; she needs to have an empty worthless and very long life where she can suffer for decades.

For now, I am off giiving any score. If the resolution comes even close to my preferred outcome it's a 5*****; if there is any reconciliation and Tanya isn't left in utter misery, it's 1*. LOL

I think Matt would be stupid if he takes Tanya or whiever she is now back. But I do morosely feel that @Inkent wants a RACC for Matt and whoevere Tanya is now and writer forces Matt to accept a soiled and used up Tan -- whoever her name is. I do admit this stories are well written and the writer has talent BUT I don'f like the plot so sue me.

I always avoid trying to debate the merits of one plot line over another, but you have truly made reconciliation inconceivable at this point. I was a little surprised you didn't bring Ann into the picture in this chapter. You certainly left a couple "turds" along the trail making it seem likely. There is a fundamental flaw in the story premise of Tanya wanting to become the best of the best. The "best' are not operatives. Operatives work for those people, folks like Graham. 4.6*

You’ve done a truly great job with this project. Tan and the MiB put on a show aimed solely at not having to kill him. Her choices endanger his life. He has to move on. Maybe he runs into Ann somewhere in London. Maybe he gets drunk and sloppy and they come back to kill him. Maybe they send her to kill him. She’s left him alone in a vacuum.

WhoGivesAShit , thanks for comments.

C06 delves into the person of Mr. Jones - I wanted to show why he became what he is. C07 starts with a clandestine meeting between Mr. Smith & Tanya a month before she goes on her ill fated holiday and you'll get to look in greater depth at Tanya and Mr. Smith himself. It will then take us off to Dubai, back for the funeral and freakish meeting in the restaurant that finally makes Matt snap and I think, the point where most readers hate her. But can I give her a chance for some readers to possibly shift into her camp in C07? And will Mr. Jones

get to live out his twisted fantasy with Tanya?

Working hard to get it out some point next week!

INKENT

Demosthenes384bc, "The "best' are not operatives. Operatives work for those people, folks like Graham."

Yep, thanks for that thought. Duly noted and drawn into C07.

INKENT

Just found this series. I'm quite enjoying it. I'm rather neutral on whether Tanya and Matt get back together. I think he's better off without her, as she clearly puts the job and any resultant infidelities ahead of his needs. I don't think makes her a bad person - that's government work for you, at a certain level - but it certainly makes her an incompatible one. We'll see what happens, and keep up the good work!

After such shitshow, there is NO WAY that Matt would take Tanya back. He already left his old life, good. Now all that's left is to build a new one. My only concern is that whole Tanya's operation will backfire so spectacularly that her target will escape, figure out her connection with Matt and target his to hurt Tanya. He shouldn't be hurt for this bitch ;)

Sorry Inkent but there's not a chance you're going to get people on the side of Tanya. Regardless of if she is being decieved by Smith and Jones she still made a choice to lie repeatedly, drug and rape her husband. That's a level of betrayal no one would forgive and even trying that would be an exercise in futility so don't bother.

ABSOLUTE shitty story I knew Tans ego would put her into this position BUT how on earth would Catch ever take her back when the supposed position of her was to be a slut NOT HAPPY MATE (jaybee186)

Using your plot points to date, he goes on with his life and finds contenment and may be a few kids. There should be NO reconciliation. Based upon your writing of these characters, she has no investment in them. As we have learned, ACTIONS SPEAK LOUDER THAN WORDS. You have clearly spelled out that in your story. If however you want to go to lala land then have her return, they make up and have lots of babies together. If he is to have any believability of standing by his word and actions, she will be just a women he used to know as the marriage never took place as per your storyline to date. The secondary storlines about Jones and Smith are just a distraction now. good luck Iine what ever direction you choose to go.

The author seems to have done a runner. Put up an awful story that got dragged by pretty much everyone for being rubbish, took it down and still no sign of chapter 7 which he promised would be out next week a couple of weeks ago. Shame as I'd have liked to see how this ended but at the same time as they seemed so intent on making excuses for Tanya that it's probably for the best.

Just 4 stars for this part too, as I think the tale is really getting a bit weird, but I will follow on to the next Part to see what happens next.

Lots of plusses and minusses! note no 's bullshit. The 'story' is WAAAAAY too long and inconclusive. It is so long it is boring and annoying. It needs euthenasia It starts out as complicated mystery and falls into a dark hole where it has truly died. With all the time taken to write this stuff. It has failed miserably. Notwithstanding some of the positive elements in the comments It is a waste of space! Sorry, you could have written a really good story in the time you wasted on this drawn-out mess. Better luck next time! Don't continue this story, It is dead!