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AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

Good premise.

Ended too abruptly.

Four stars.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

Even if you plan on continuing this, that ending needs work.

ElektracalElektracalabout 1 year agoAuthor

Thank you for your feedback. =) I've submitted an edited version to address your comments, which will hopefully be published within the week. The chapter still ends on a cliffhanger, but I've tried to improve the pacing so that it's not so abrupt. I don't think it helped that only two sentences ended up on the third page either!

Crusader235Crusader235about 1 year ago

Very Hot, can't wait for more. Five stars

liqueurliqueur11 months ago

Boringly cliche

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