All Comments on 'After Dinner'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
No Romance

Where was the romance? All there was a description of sex. No character development, no emotional attachment. Perhaps this would have been better placed under ertoic couplings where the expectations are different. Even then a plot is important to engage the reader, this work does not offer that. Are the couple married, dating, just a hookup? Give us a reason to care about what happens. Sex as sex is borning.

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