All Comments on 'Afternoon Playground'

Suggestion.. she could make him a cup of tea

Where's the story?

But not yet a story than can stand on its own. Please finish it, having started so well. Thank you, four stars.

Yes it was concise, but one shouldn't judge a story on the number of words. I had the sense it was a very personal and real glimpse of your "secretdesire"... I would love to hear more. How dark are your passions?

Whatever gets you there, as long as there's no cheating, swapping, or cucking.