All Comments on 'Al Gets Lucky'

A decent enough concept, marred by terrible punctuation, run-on sentences, and just general sloppiness.

And then, the reference to having an "organism." If that's not a joke, and I don't think it is, the author simply doesn't know what's what. Once I might have understood, but it's repeated so often, I had to flunk the story.

Hook up with an editor, please.

It was an interesting concept...but the run-on sentences and the "organisms" were a bit distracting. Please continue to write, but make sure to read over your work before submitting or get an editor. Either way, good luck.

organism got put in by word because apparently gates wife never had an orgasm...lol good work...got me off :)

Jeez....