All Comments on 'Alaine Becomes the Alien’s Bitch'

Hope you continue this story into a series.

It's very good. I dig a lot of what you're doing here, and you've got a good touch with the details. Two things stood out as potential improvements. There's a point where you repeat the word 'ass' too frequently, it pulls one out of the story. The second thing was that you called out the question of what the son would look like, but never followed through with a description, or even letting us know he had approached. That definitely felt like a gap. There's lots of room here for more chapters.

Anal lips: not a thing.

This was borderline incomprehensible. Do you proofread? You should learn to.

To the most recent Anonymous: I've seen worse, much worse, on this site. This is not that bad, actually. Not as good as some, of course, but not nearly as bad as many.

This is my first story of yours I've read, Zach. I actually mainly read it because your Bio page made me laugh. Never heard anybody use "drapes and carpet" before. I figured you must be worth reading.