All Comments on 'Alan Ch. 06'

This story was a waste of my time. Next time, write a story that has somewhat of a good plot.

well... i do believe that if the ass above would have taken the time to read the fist installments of this story his reaction would have been quite different.

personally... i think this is a great story and will be patently awaiting the next installments

Excellent work, please keep the storyline as crisp and refreshing as it is now. Keep building the characters as they are, don't change them to drasticly. This is overall

one of the better mind control series I have read.

Joel

I enjoy the mystic twist please develop that more

I only have one criticism. Proof read it before you post it. Other than that, great story.

storyline's great, just keep up the good work and keep the chapters cuming

In this Chapter Alan continues to waste his largely-undeveloped Power by just fucking the trio of Girlfriends he has secured from school. Not very promising, for a young man with potentially unlimited power to get anything (or anyone) he wants.

Poor Cuckold Chad!!! Alan is an asshole!!!

I've been bugged about the piercing thing for a while now, as a tattoo artist and piercer for decades I have to say, EVERYTHING in your discerption of the piercing was wrong! First, we rarely, meaning all but NEVER pierce a body part other than an ear with gold, 99.999% of the time we use surgical steel. No ether, no betadine, and NEVER, NEVER, NEVER does a piece of jewelry go into ANY liquid solution before piercing. It comes straight out of the AUTOCLAVE or a sealed, dated, proofed IO Gas sterilized package, as do the clamps. Needles are usually sterilized in EO Gas, usually along with the jewelry to be used with the needle. Next on the list of misunderstanding, we use the same gage needles (usually 14 on a nipple but on rare occasion a 16 or even an 18 depending on the size of the nipple in question. Rule of thumb, higher the number, thinner the piece.), add a dab of petroleum jelly to the needle tip so it pushes through smoothly, then we use the jewelry to PUSH OUT the needle. Skin is quite elastic and that whole squeezes shut as fast as the needle is removed. That isn't to say you can't do it you described, assuming you enjoy inflicting needless pain and misery to what is generally a simple yelp of pain/shock followed by a week of dull ache and mind blanking agony when someone hits, grabs or even bumps into the piercing, or is rolled on to it while sleeping until it is healed. Playing with it the same day is sadistic and begging for an infection that under the best circumstances will force them to take out the piercing and wait till it heals then consider if it is worth going through it all again or if it is worth it to even have a pierced nipple. I'm not even going to begin to discuss all the bacteria in a human mouth and cross contamination via that source. Last, but so freaking far from least, the type of "Ring" you described is called a "Capture ring" the ball is held in place by small divot's ground into either side of the ball and the springiness in the ring, the ring is closed after the piercing to a size just smaller than the ball after the piercing is finished then with a pair of stretchers (think pliers in reverse, when you squeeze the handles the end opens rather than closing like pliers) you gently stretch out the ring, line the ends of the ring with the divot's in the ball and then let the ring itself clamp down onto the ball like a spring. Thus the name, the ring "captures" the ball, you NEVER SOLDER!!! A) solder will heat the ring causing burns. B) Jewelry is meant to be changed once it heals, can't do that if it's soldered shut!. I could list the reason why a Gold capture ring is a bad idea, but since you realized that 24 karat would be too soft for the ring, actually 14 would too, 10 karat would be the MAX, that said, rings are lost all the time, a bent bar with screw down balls would be best if you were going to use gold, then 24 karat is just fine. Unless of course money is no object and you can afford to throw a hundred to a few hundred bucks worth of gold away, by all means, feel free.

Why was she even with Chad when he can't get her off. Not even once. You see this a lot in all these stories. Do they really put up with being a sexually unsatisfied fleshlight for their moron boyfriends because of social status? Quite the retarded sacrifice if you ask me. They'd be a million times happier if they just put all that garbage aside, embraced who they really are and found someone that they actually connect with, instead of embracing a façade.

Anyway, the party was boring. I thought we'd see some interesting drama there. But nope, just a quickie outside that no one knows about and some slight verbal harassment that is quickly forgotten. Lame.