All Comments on 'Alex and Emma'

Ok, while the story itself is good, I had to force myself to finish it...................................... One of the reasons I had to force myself, see end of previous sentence. Excessive, and I do mean EXCESSIVE use of periods and exclamation points. The overuse distracted a lot from the story and made the text itself just look clunky, it also contributed to the bad formatting problems suffered by the story.

It also seems to me like you just copy/pasted from a word document. The problem there is that Literotica lines don't have the same length as lines in Word. Therefore, whenever you used enter to switch line instead of just continuing to write and let word do the word-wrap by itself, you end up here with an empty line that shouldn't be there and it really screws up the reading.

If you can just edit your story to get rid of those two things, I strongly believe that you'll see your average votes go up a lot.

Wow, fucking hot hot hot, wish it were me fucking and sucking this hot lush cunt, will have to act it out with some of my women friends. Cunt lapping sex maniac UK

I believe the concept behind the story is good, but it's lackluster. It's not as hot or steamy as I imagined it'd be. And as a writer, there are serious writing flaws here. It's just ok, but not what I was hoping it'd be.

Would love to read more sexual adventures between Alex and Emma.

Thanks you all for your comments. I am strongly considering a sequal to this story,but I still considering where to take this story. Have a number of ideas I am considering.I actually have a new story that will appear on the site very soon. We will see how that one is received,and after that,I will most likely write the sequal. Until then,hope you continue to enjoy this story and my new one.

For me, the problem is when authors use real people doing something that never happened. When it's fictional characters, it's fiction. When it's real people, it's a lie. The only time a story with real people works is when it's fiction based on fact, such as a historical novel. This is definitely not fiction based on fact.

I love Harry Potter RPF, both hetero and gay. that was a very entertaining and hot story.

Why do you change line mid-sentenc? Really tiresome to read. Also, what's with all the exclamation marks, again tiresome to read, as well as all the dot-dot-dot-dot-dot-dot.

Otherwise nice story.