All Comments on 'Alistaire Ch. 03: Beth'

Another 5

I've read most of your series stories, for some reason left this one out.

You are hitting plausible reality right on the head, well done

Nope. Never Choate. Never.

Choate?

What version of dnd is that? Or is rolling for suprise homebrew?

Love your style and banter but the story has become repetitious and lacking in development. One girl after the other, following the same sexual sequence.

I would really like him to encounter a dominant woman who teaches him something and takes him...

Anonymous-10 months ago-made first comment, because of the poor grammar and misuse of words...he/she is not the only one to see it...AND IT IS DISTRACTING, to say the least!!

Still, a very good story, going to next chapter...

Don't stop! Don't stop!

Especially love the girls comparing notes...and passing him along!

I was a happy beneficiary of that...Would love to be again!

Yes, ladies, I mean it! :+PPPP

Truth, Joy & Love!

Marty

I LOVE your stories (though the typos disrupt, but that's just me...maybe have your partner pre-edit?).

at the risk of using profanity, its is FUCKING AWESOME!

This is an excellent story with plenty of sex--previous chapters included. The sex scenes are wonderfully described. Although, I do not see the need for bolded words throughout the story. Great job!

I refrained from commenting till now but your misuse of the words me and my are driving me insane. Very good story.

What a great setup and follow-through. Love this series!

Could've used a bit more development of Beth, but still a great read.

By the way, you seem to be mixing slugging percentage (total bases/at bats) and batting average (hits/at bats). Slugging percentage maxes out at 4.000 (a home run each at bat) while batting average maxes out at 1.000 (a hit each at bat). In the parlance of "rounding the bases" he would be slugging 4.000 having hit a home run with each girl.

Love the clever banter. That brings the stories to another level.

O.M.G.....Batting a 1000....who could be that lucky!!!!???? AWESOME story again.... love it!!

FYI - Slugging % is Total Bases / At Bats. Al is slugging 4.000

Great read!!

Great! I hope you have more than the 5 parts. You are doing a great job with the gene. Go Alistaire!

Curious to see where this goes... the joy of the nerd harem series is finding a way to hold the tension (however implausible)... but Al is going from strength to strength without adversity yet.... I worry the series could lose tension...

I know this is erotica but for the fucking where’s the story. Seems there should be more.

Outstanding. Again.