by Jenny_Jackson
This is very good. I love the build up and the climax. Very well done lass!
Not at all what I expected, No Hippo's - The story was very, very well done. My best wishes to you in the contest.
Jenny Jackson, this wasn't what I expected. No swearing or tittie exposure or flipping the bird. Just a great old-fashioned horror tale. Very well told...and scary! Great job and best of luck in the contest.
That was awesome JJ! I really enjoyed the visualizations from this story. Great job!
A cracking good little horror tale. Your use of dialect and mood setting are excellent. Good luck in the contest.
Jenny, That was one good horror story. The language you wrote made me feel I was in the inn listening to them talk. During the fighting and burning, I couldn't help but think of 'Night of the living dead'. Very well written and a well deserved 5
With respect
DG Hear
The imagery was awesome Jenny. That was really creepy. Just a tip, the italics are <I> </I>...I had the same problem with them ;)
Thsi should have been labeled as non-erotic instead of erotic horror. Where was the eroticism?
Jenny. This had the makings of a great story with the horror and the dark and foreboding ending. I really enjoyed it. Good luck with the contest!