All Comments on 'American in Paradise Ch. 01'

by DanCitrine

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AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

As a description of a couple making and then a threesome having sex was okay, but I was waiting for the twist to add some interest. It never occurred and at the end I was disappointed. The first chapter of a story needs to at least hint at the future direction so that the reader will return.

WatcherRobWatcherRobover 7 years ago
Agree

I agree with anonymous.

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