All Comments on 'Among The Pines'

Thank you for taking the time to read my story! I'd love to hear your feedback, positive or negative, either here in the public comments or privately in an e-mail. I look forward to hearing your thoughts on my work.

I really would love to see you continue this story, and to see where it leads after such a great setup!

As a woman myself I find it really difficult to find erotic stories that aren't just porn. Really. This was quite wonderful and I found it extremely satisfying... If you understand me...

This is a really great story. I would love to see it continued. You have a talent for writing and bringing a good tale to life. Please keep writing.

ACLASSYLADY

I loved it! Everything flowed so well. It was hot yet tranquil. Almost poetic even. I enjoyed it. Keep writing!

I've rated this story as a 5 which means it was well written, structurally very sound, and sexually / sensually appealing in the best of ways. Certainly it's unique for Tom and reader as all of the wonderful parts of the sexual experience are woven into the narrative so well even though there is mystery about the man.

Stunningly good story, KPW. Effective erotica but also as enjoyable a read as great short fiction of any genre. One question: Are you familiar with Neal Gaiman's character Desire (see image: : http://comicvine.gamespot.com/desire-of-the-endless/4005-40832/news/)? Or is the color of the wolf's eyes of some other significance?

KS

Erotic and well-written - a rare combination on this site. Not only was it erotic, but fucking hot. Who wouldn't want to be taken that way! I used to walk the woods naked, longing for this sort of scenario, but it never happened. Thanks for articulating my fantasy so well.

a well-authored short story of late adolescence, youth coming to the realization of self, - 'some paths once started down must be followed' - finely tuned, feral, hinting on the supernatural. KPW, your first here, with more to follow, I trust. If this is your first anywhere, then you are truly a gifted writer, with a talent worthy of pursuing.

The main character was very real and showed many of the dynamics around sexuality. The story led me down the boy's path and made me wish, for a moment, that I was him. Hope you will write more stories.

As a fairly fit 22 yr old , I liked to explore the forest just outside town , wandering for hours and never seeing a soul - my solitude was broken one summers morning by two men ( in their 30s I guessed) , they were on mountain bikes and stopped by a large oak tree and dismounted , leaning their bikes against the tree - both were clad in tight Lycra shorts and tops ... I watched idly from my concealed vantage point , but couldn’t hear them very well , they both took off their helmets - then embraced each other , but it was no ordinary embrace, they kissed and stroked each other passionately !! ( I was witnessing an illicit meeting deep in the woods ) , their movements became more urgent as they clung to each other and the smaller of them tugged at the others shorts , dragging them down over his hips to reveal his naked bum and cock !! - oh wow I was getting horny myself !!- the smaller man slid his own shorts down then squatted and licked the bigger mans shaved cock - from balls to tip .... I saw his face contort ( probably pure pleasure ) as his friend worked his cock - my own was now in my hand and throbbing as I watched

The bigger mans hands went to his friends head and he fucked his face vigoursely with deep strokes .. I could tell he was cumming by his expression he seemed to stiffen up , then his cock came out and spurted all over his friends face , hair and shirt !! - I was close myself , holding on as well as I could !!

They stood and kissed again , but there was more !!

The big guy who had just been sucked off , leaned forward onto the tree as the smaller one moved between his legs and pushed his cock into the crack of his bum ... oh lovely he was going to fuck him .. slowly he eased his cock into him and started to thrust in and out , gathering speed all the while .. I could now hear their urgent cries plainly as they fucked in front of me

I think we came together , my load boiling out of my cock just as he filled his bum

I stayed hidden as they composed themselves and saw I was covered in cum , unable to move a muscle in case they heard me !!

5 minutes later they were gone - I just wish I had been brave enough to show myself