All Comments on 'Amy Ch. 02'

This was really good, but I am confused as to who is narrating this story. For the most part it seems to be Amy but then every now and then we get something from Darren, except he seems to have an inner voice that is very similar to Amy's. Guys swear, or at least use loose language, especially teenaged guys on the football team. At other times it seems like there is a 'third person' voice that is an outside observer. I also found the dialogue to be a bit too formal for teenagers. I don't know any 18 yr olds that talk like that.

All in all it was really good though. Good job! Ava.