All Comments on 'Amy - Day 01 Pt. 04-05'

Loving this story. More please

Köstlich !

Vielen Dank für diese schöne Geschichte.

Getting pretty good, there author!

Really good so far. Much enjoying.

Please sir, could we have some more??.....Please!

It was just so damned short. I know it's your story/fantasy but have mercy on us.

DOM74, I am a fan of your story. While the ending was wonderful, it's emotion you're writing conveys. The pain, joy, love, hope. Being of similar age, 52, as Dave, the story resonated with me. A lot. I look forward to future "Days and Parts".

Critique in an effort to improve the readers experience: Reread your story. Look for errors of grammar and, mainly, missing letters to words. I have seen mentions in stories by other authors where they have their stories proofed by other authors.

That said, very well done! Thank you very much for a wonderful story.

sd31r20

I have to agree with Klitomatic and others who have complained about the brevity of your submissions. You should be shooting for twice the length of what you're giving us now. In other words, Day 01 Pt. 01-05 should have been all one single submission.

I'm still going to give you a five, but work on giving us larger chapters please! 5/5

Man is he fucked but good story and now we are finding that a lot in today's world.

Never, ever tell a screamer no to ‘round 2’. Rather quick from the meet to the meat, pun intended. Transition is moving damn good, but IMSO (In My Stupid Opinion) a big jump in the end. All and still, I am hang on fir the next chapter. 5*

I like her "You will treat me right" ethic (you will stay the night, and not scamper off) at the end of the story. Smart, with personality

I would have preferred one or two more sentences here or there to add just a bit more explanation, build the heat or in some way, fill the gap, between their conversation, and sex, with her yelling "Fuck your twin!"

Still, hot and good! Good characterization and background, nice family build and structure, good all around.

Looking forward to more erotic sex, beyond "we must fuck now."

With the development of our hero, and the fact that our love interest seems smart and interesting, I am confident in you

With all of this family structure and established characters (the brothers wanted a sister), revelation of this incest seems fraught with peril

Five for you

Love the story instantly. As said below, very well personalized, and funny as well.

Plus no bs.

Easiest 5

The missing letters in some words are a little distracting, but good story. Surprised they consummated their reunion so fast... looking forward to the remaining chapters. Guessing the daughters aren't going to be happy he is going out with their aunt.