All Comments on 'An Afternoon Nap'

It's great to have new talent on the site.

I'm sorry to say that I found the story promising but disjointed. Especially the end. How does where he woke up fit into the narrative?

Howdy anon! I agree, I've had some feedback on how I need to improve the flow. The waking up on the couch is supposed to represent that this whole thing was a fantasy the mc had and is in fact very lonely at the moment. I'm trying to find out how to illustrate that "twist" better without stating it outright.