All Comments on 'An Alien Spider's Love Ch. 03'

funnt cute and thought out i love this story line keep it rolling along

Good luck with finding a publisher - I guess. This is not good for literotica though, as your story will remain unfinished here - and there are plenty of unfinished fragments as it is :-(

I found this plot interesting and full of potential. Lots of good detail but the scenes seemed rushed and information comes all at once. Dahlia seems to overcome her fear of arachnids far too fast, rushing from trepidation to lust in just a few chapters. While I understand the context of the pouch sisters, this could have been used for good character development rather than just changing all her feelings in such a short time.

But I agree it does seem rushed and you need to explain a bit more.

Watch your spelling as well in some places it is hard to read.