by geeklove
keep it going more chapters
Please more chapters. This is amazing
Really hoping to read more and hope the story continues.
Several chapters in mind. Next one half done
Fix your grammar and capitalise names.
Great concept and hot, I'm throbbing in my cage. However you need some proofreading, either yourself or have a friend help. The slipping from third to first person is jarring. Gave it a 4, would have been 5 otherwise.
Sign me up immediately!