All Comments on 'An Evil Woman Pt. 02'

Wow, this is well done, Bobbi. Powerful stuff xxxxx

Excellent!

Very suspenseful and dramatic.

Building tension…awaiting next chapter….

Great stuff, Bobbi. Shades of Dr Fu Manchu---your evil Chinese lady makes me think of the books and films of the 1920s and 1930s when thriller writers believed in The Yellow Peril. Evil is definitely in the ascendancy. I'm sure that our heroine will get out of this---it will just be interesting to see how she does so. I've got a couple of minor quibbles. Corrine says: "...I wouldn't be so amused if I could understand them..." If she couldn't understand them, how did she know they were speaking Cantonese and was able to translate all that was said? A lot of Chinese dialects sound alike to the untutored ear. The other point is you mention "Great Briton". The country is Great Britain, a Briton is a native of Britain. You are a good writer, Bobbi, so try to avoid small errors like these. Still, I am liking this story so much and it's well written so it's five stars from me.

Very dramatic and very suspenseful. I am on the edge of my seat trying to imagine how our heroine can extracticate herself from this impossible situation but I have every confidence that the writer will show us that good will triumph over evil and all will be well with the world. An excellent story and very well written. Well done.

It’s just amazing! 5 Stars isn’t enough. Xxx

Maonaigh - thank you I have made several errors like those you mention. I see them only after they have been pointed out. So thank you. Yes being of English stock myself, that is something I should have been correct about.

In that part of the story where she was coming to grips with her situation, maybe I should have mentioned that it was a 'feeling' one gets when you don't understand the language but you know the people talking are talking about you and not to your benefit.

Again thank you.

This is so good. I have no idea how Corrine is going to get out of her predicament but I am eagerly awaiting finding out. The script could have done with a final proofread but the errors were minor and did not interrupt the flow of the story. A worthy five stars.

Yes, Alice, you are right. In my haste to get it published, I seem to have overlooked some very elementary errors. I will try harder in the future.

I keep seeing a maiden tied to a railway track with a steam train coming fast in the distance. Her predicament is similar but she is the heroine in this story, not 100% certain how or if she will survive.

I am mesmerised and blown off my chair by your super thrilling story. This is so good, thank you!

Firstly I must admonish myself for not reading chapter 2 earlier. A very compelling chapter and I will be interested to see how or even if she gets out of her predicament. 5 stars and onto chapter 3 straight away.

Bloody Brilliant!

Hallo Arking!

We love hot lesbian mysteries and this is a well written mysterie, about what you called a modern-day scourge... now I have another name for it, but let's not go there!

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This walks a line I'm not sure is moral.

Human trafficking is definitely a serious serious problem that pretty much every government on the planet has chosen to either ignore or say a few words to placate the masses, caring only enough to get re-elected.

And I applaud attempts to highlight the problem and, perhaps, draw attention to it as a human crisis.

But, I'm not feeling good about an erotica story being published using, fiction or not, trafficking for the amusement and sexual gratification of horny onlookers. The characters may be fictional, but they are being exploited here, just like the characters themselves are about to find themselves exploited in this story.

I'm uncomfortable with the moral responsibility behind this.

This walks a line I'm not sure is moral.

Human trafficking is definitely a serious serious problem that pretty much every government on the planet has chosen to either ignore or say a few words to placate the masses, caring only enough to get re-elected.

And I applaud attempts to highlight the problem and, perhaps, draw attention to it as a human crisis.

But, I'm not feeling good about an erotica story being published using, fiction or not, trafficking for the amusement and sexual gratification of horny onlookers. The characters may be fictional, but they are being exploited here, just like the characters themselves are about to find themselves exploited in this story.

I'm uncomfortable with the moral responsibility behind this.

@okami1061 - Thank you, for your comments. However, this website is for those out there who want to be titillated by reading erotica. I have tried to engineer a storyline where I can meet the needs of the many readers of the story as well as 'prick' their conscience. Hopefully, by my throwing a few seeds into their subconscience they may think about why such things are still happening. Feel free to email me if you wish to continue the discussion.

For the plot, unfortunately you are writing about criiminal actions still happen nowadays ….. all those motorcycle gangs are involved with prostitution or other mafias ….. the society just turns a blind eye ….. its always a borderline case writing about criminal activities for entertainment

That was not planned and really not caring about your backside is your death ….. so hanging around and playing damsel in distress, is based on her own stupidity ….. already having the knowledge about the chinese mafia ˋ myrads ˋ or? Should have ring some bells ….. it was an easy catch

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