All Comments on 'An Orgy at Milkers Inc.'

Nice ending, everyone was happy!

Best story EVER!!!

Would love another client to stop by the office

Amazing story in my opinion.

I have an idea for a breast expansion story. At night, a meteorite crash lands on Earth and a parasite goo comes out of it, goes to a woman's house and goes to the woman's breasts while she's sleeping to live in them and uses her milking glands to reproduce more of itself leading to a out of control breast expansion and ruining the woman's life amd her breasts. Please make this story!

You should get a proofreader to check for things like typos and especially continuity. When Jess first takes her bra off the salesman says "Braless? That's brave of you," to which she replies "I can't find any bras for me...." etc.

Then, at the end:

Jess: "My boobs are stick together and somebody stole my bra."

"Another bra lost," Ron said.

Hard to lose a bra that you didn't start out with. Also, it is 'stuck together', not 'stick together'.

Anyway, keep at it, but paying attention to details will really help your stories improve.