All Comments on 'An Unexpected Guest'

Quite liked it but there are no consequences hinted at. Stds or pregnancy - what happens if either or both happen?

And Brian is an idiot.

I guess it's all over except the crying. A spoiled, immature 18 yo with a big dick. Shaun sounds like a mommies boy who has gotten away with too many things. Brian thinks Phillip was the cause of the problems and that Shaun would be a model guest. How about now? I guess before Brian catches Amy and the worthless and most certainly ungrateful punk, one or more of Shaun's buddies will have had her too. Guess she can move into the Annex with punk boy until after the divorce is final. Amy was jealous of Shaun's girl friend as if she was her competition. Brian wasn't even an after thought. Maybe Shaun will knock her up?

As usual my imagination is running wild with where your story will take us. I'm in!

And living with some unknown stranger and divorced... nice job, 5 lives ruined. And in only 2 days.

Once again an apparently normal wife so easily lets a young guy fuck her bare back with no care to STD, Pregnancy, or the loss of her marriage.

You wrote a good story, but it would have been much easier to read if you'd brush up on the proper use of commas. (I know--I also have a real problem with them.)

Anyway, I encourage you to continue writing. cd

...no reason to get upset about the story nor hate the writer. Let’s not show our insecurities when we criticize a story.

Again, good or bad it’s just fantasy. Lets have fun.....

Please write a second part, we will all give you something to laugh about it with our criticism. ****

Terrible. Just god awful.

Short story going no where!

He'd have to be VERY thin to fit in a hose. Of course you meant "house", but there were too many other errors to ignore. Please keep writing, but please find an editor.

Four to many people out to criticise !

I enjoyed it.

If a story is good enough to give me an erection, and for me to masturbate whilst I’m reading it, then it as achieved it’s goal. That is what Erotic stories are all about ! The last thing I’m bothered about it punctuation.

I liked it and hope you write more. I would encourage a bit more proof reading.

People criticize what they read for no reason, We aren't JK Rowling writing for money. We write to tell a story. Do people watch movies and say how unrealistic it is that Superman can fly? Nope they don't hope you don't let idiots with opinions stop you from telling your stories bro

I hope there is a sequel and hope her husband finds out of her cheating.

Good story made even better by crisp delivery

It was right in the story.. husband is hard at work and she can't even remain faithful to him..I hope he finds out and throws both their asses out on the street... its what filthy whore sluts deserve !

That there are several sequels to this. What a fantastic story!

This story is DOA, and I hope you just bury it.

if i ever found out my wife ever did this i would take a baseball bat and bash her head in

Just came across this story.

Frankly don't now why I bothered.

Just bad, on so many levels.

From the grammar and the editing to the character development, really terrible.

"I didn't think it was possible but this both sucks and blows."

Needs a sequel or two maybe, so many ways to go mmm