All Comments on 'An Unexpected Visitor'

Great start! Can't wait for the next part!

More ambitious and erotic than your first one, this story made me super horny. I love the guys watching each other; the voyeurism; the gothic naughtiness. It reminded me of those topless, innocent, hammer horror movies where youngsters steal glimpses of one another in the dead of night. Nicely written, Isaac. More please. xx

People have a toned body not a tone body - good story but please learn this!!!

the definition of tone is: the state of a living body or of any of its organs or parts in which the functions are healthy and performed with due vigor. It is a noun so, as you say, it is not the proper word to be used. The correct adjective would be toned. Thank you for correcting my mistake.