All Comments on 'An Unwanted Promotion'

Pardon me for not being familiar with onegaverse lore, but its not doing much for me. The characters aren't behaving like actual humans, but like horny sex-spirits or something.

That being said, there are titillating descriptions in there and I applaud the courage to try an unconventional narrative voice

Well I understand that people have different writing preferences and perhaps he was an author or not necessarily writing for the masses but writing it like it's a Choose Your Own Adventure novel is kind of really annoying. It would be much better if you chose a name for the individual and just acted like it was a story happening to someone else not "you" or <insert name here> it's very jarring to read. Also the story over all was slow build with eh ending.

To the people complaining about the sedond person POV: Sorry, I only have a few thousand followers on my blog but in that community reader inserts are what are requested. I have never had a reader request anything but second person. I did not like this story much though, it was just a request I was not too into at all. So I agree it was a bit lackluster. But if you don't like the POV I don't care and while I think your reading preferences are valid, they are not a valid complaint to me at all.

I really liked this story; POV, the characters, and I enjoyed learning more about omegaverse., I hope you keep writing, looking forward to more stories from you!