All Comments on 'Anna and Ramone'

I am impressed so far. Looking forward..

Great story, I wouldn't have expected the rape. Thanks

This chapter is a nice set-up. (Although, it would have been nice for the reader to know in advance that this was to be a first chapter of more to come.) It'll be interesting to see how you tie together all these opening elements.

-- KK in Texas

I didn't expect the rape either. That totally threw me for a loop. This story has much potential and could easily be made into a really great long story. It has all the right elements from the characters to the story line. Looking forward to this one.

The final draft came out well. Good start. Thanks for the editing nod.

It was WAY to short!!!!! Would have been better if it were longer but I guess I'll have to wait till the next chapter comes out huh. Really good though!!

How old are they at the start? A bully took her doll, yet they're old enough to be interested in the opposite sex?, have jealousy when he's dancing with another? A girl young enough to be playing with dolls is too young for that kind of behaviour.