by bwelch
You can send me your stories and I can help you editing if you want. Great story by the way
That was fun....A touch here and there and it might flow a bit smoother....
Sorry, I couldn't read beyond your appalling opener, "As my week drug by..."
The English translation would be, "As my week dragged by..."
Please, some respect for the language. No stars.
your story has everything a good romance needs - lovable characters and you know how to evoke feelings in your readers - keep up the good work. Please don't get daunted by someone saying this is crap because of some minor things, that can be easily smoothed out.
In fact, as many editors will tell you, there is no story that didn't get a bit of editing to make it shine. (looking at the comments... you even might have found an editor :) )
warm wishes all the way from Germany
Good start. You pulled the three chapters together nicely, but left enough loose ends for creating additional chapters.
Just a little tweaking to remove minor errors would be all I suggest.
Welcome to the community.
I loved your story and hope you keep writing.
To the grammar fanatic... Get over yourself. It didn't detract from the wonderful story being told one bit. Next time why don't you try leaving a comment with a handle instead of as anonymous. I have no respect for anyone that bitches as anonoymous. Chicken shit is what they are.
This story is so amazing I love it! I hope you continue writing on it.
Whatever the reason, I'm distraught that you've not written more stories! I loved it! Many thanks.