by shivanihore
I've read better stories on the inside of an empty cornflake packet. The entire thing was unbelievable, poorly written, and lacking in any sense that the author had even had sex, let alone any kind of real submission/dominance.
Maybe you should ask your english teacher to help you next time, as I really doubt you're out of high school.
I've rarely read such a lack luster story. The concept was okay, but that was it. The author did NOTHING with the potential.