All Comments on 'Ann's Enlightenment Ch. 03'

I liked the story, even if at times I felt that you went into too much detail. I guess what derailed me was the fact that you get to a point then stop the story. I feel that the story should have had one or two more chapters so that there was some resolution. For that reason, I gave it 4 stars instead of 5.

Very nice but it needs a little spice, Your characters are ok you are pretty good, you show a lot of promise But you may be holding back, I recommend you loosen up and let your slef go for it,

Hope I'm helping

good luck

I agree with pepepilot. I loved your story but, I held back the fifth star because your characters were created to be perfect. They were built to perfectly fit into psychobable solutions usually accepted in our current society. Thus the story felt incomplete. We were left with the assumption that David and Ann armed with tools and insights provided by Sarah during therapy will live happily ever after avoiding future pitfalls.