All Comments on 'April in Texas Ch. 10'

S, high mark because this chapter, standing alone, has a hot sex scene. But it lacked considerable heat that would have come with sharing your feelings and experience of it. You got fucked at least 5 times, not counting the rotation at the end, and give us no hint that you had an orgasm. What makes a story about triple penetration different from the hundreds of other stories about the same thing is sharing your unique sensations and emotional context. All you gave us here is standard stroke stuff - who put what in which hole.

As episode 10 in your novel, it is a falsehood. You have just had a pleasant day with Louie and the reader has no preparation at all for your sudden and inexplicable decision to fuck two strange men, when you haven't done so in years. It doesn't fit with anything you have told us thus far about you or your relationship with Louie. A grating lie.

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