by daemonrunner
my wife and I love this series. nice slow build with great sex, we hope that you continue this for a while to come.
wow...the living room action was hot. well written...i will sure to be following this story into the next chapter. kudos
Great story so far, just really hoping the dad isn't involved with the company funding the experiment
I'm in for the long haul with this one, you hooked me at the start. I was hoping for Tony getting some payback on some people this chapter. The Sex with mom was amazing, thanks again for a great series.
I love it, please post the next chapter soon!
Poor proofreading--botched grammar, spelling errors and awkward word choices--are the only thing holding this story back from being 5 Stars.
There are different kinds of stories on this site, ranging from "quick fix" to "in it for the long haul" to "I skipped reading the sex scenes to find out what happens in the plot", and this one rests squarely between the first two. It's very well thought out, and the author clearly has several directions in mind. There sex is hot, and the leadup to it is at times even hotter, and the story elements between sexy bits are intriguing, keeping you wanting to read more.
A very promising story, and one I would love to see a conclusion to, even though that would take several more chapters, at the very least.
The scene on the couch involving the four of them was well written, highly erotic. The series been very well done. There have been a few small errors but nothing to take away the flow of the story. Looking forward to more.
Yes there were errors but I overlooked them. Find an editor who can rectify these issues. But overall I enjoyed the storyline and look forward to the next chapter. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Way too wordy. Tony didn't do any of his family till page 5 of ch. 2. I skipped over a lot of it. I kept saying to myself "come onnnn"
Overall a solid story so far but I wish you would reveal if there is pheromone component to the virus. There are a few "hints", or maybe not, but otherwise the women in the family's behavior is too fictionalized. I'm hoping we find out more about why the father isn't interested in a beautiful wife (I would assume affair). Ignore the bullshit complaints about the sex. Well written incest stories explore the complex relationships as well as the taboo sex. You're doing a pretty good job of trying to do that balance, less my previous comment. 4*