All Comments on 'Aria's Journey Ch. 01: The Warehouse'

There are some editorial issues, "checks instead of cheeks" not that they detracted greatly from the enjoyment of the story. I like this chapter despite the lack of sex and it being so short. There is a flow to the writing that is appealing. There is potential here; I hope!

I like the plot so far, but there are a lot of errors. Nipples aren't "barren." Maybe you mean "bared"? Please get an editer or proofread your work a lot more carefully - or both. :).

I've been trying to find something good to read after seeing that The Rebellious Slave and Lovely Dove probably aren't coming back... And I think I may have just found it! Please continue and don't leave me hanging like the rest of these great writers!