All Comments on 'Ariel's Slutty Descent - Day 03'

Since there was NO protection used. Did Ariel get knocked up, pick up a STD or both????

Asinine unrealistic racist stupidity

curious how it would end.

When are we getting more?

Great story so far, can’t wait to see the next chapters to come.

Problems that should be addressed before the story is totally lost.

1) This is still a non-consent story where Ariel is being forced.

2) The horny sex drug excuse does not work . One can be horny and consciously reject sex with people who are doing harm to same (such as a thug who sexually assaulted you, an evil stepmother and assorted strangers.

3) The idea that Ariel can have normal dialogue and not give away that she is drugged and basically semiconscious makes this story enter the realm of a fairy tale.

4) The father would clearly notice she is drugged and talk to her alone.

5) The idea that Ariel would be more concerned with her father thinking she is a "whore" when the stepmother threatens her, when she can simply let her father find out she has been raped and drugged is absurd. Here, she is consciously worrying about her reputation when she is barely awake and in her more lucid moments, she knows what was done and is being done to her.

If all of the above was stirred into a different direction, the story could be saved. But implausible reactions to events and impossible consciousness by Ariel and acquiescence with the bad people and the the also implausible reaction by her father make no sense. A re-write eliminating above issues and the silly fantastic horny drug would work fine. Thanks!