All Comments on 'Art Class Modelling'

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Really great story, need a part two for this!

Good story, well written. Would be interesting to see how this plays out for both Ryan and Julia

Now on to Ryan and the teacher.

That's really what I want to see.

I liked the plot and the characters in this story, and I hope that more will come concerning what follows with Ryan, Professor Lynn, and Julia (I would really like to know what the Professor will reveal about her sexual attraction to Ryan); I gave the story 4 stars.

I truly wish, though, that the (relatively-inexperienced at Literotica) author will in the near future find an editor (preferably -- to make sentences sound better and to make sure that incorrect words are *not* substituted for intended ones (I believe I found "groan" for "groin", for example) ) *and* re-read submissions at least one more time *before* they are submitted, to reduce the number of missteps.

One other quibble: I *think* that Ryan has so far been a model *only* for the Professor, and not in front of a class -- so I would ask for a change in the story/series title *if* Ryan (and possibly Julia, or others) *does not* appear in front of an "Art Class" within the next 2 or so installments. (Otherwise, "Modelling for Professor Lynn" would seem better, to me.)

I *do* -- again -- like the characters and what has been done with the premise of a virgin model being eased toward display of his nude body and toward sex in front of an audience -- but *please* pay more attention to editing (!).

Sincerely,

Ethan (in New York City)

I echo nycreader’s comments; but feel those issues detracted more from the story. Also, the flow of the story and behavior of the characters was not smooth.

Superb. We need more episodes, of the same quality!

A really fun story but unfortunately marred by a lack of editing as stated below. Keep working at it!

Love it. Need more episodes

Definitely looking forward to future episodes. Great dialogue, full descriptions, and good timeline that your characters fill very well. Not being bc a writer myself, I found the mistakes I the story easy to read over and easily substitute with the correct word. 5 stars.

I love this storyl it was a super turn on for me! I sure hope there is more to cum!

I would support the comments previously offered suggesting editing is necessary. The run on sentences distract from the story. Your conversations, story, imagination and flow are all very good.

I was not distracted by the mistakes, but proofreading would be a good thing.

Having said that, you handled a formula plot really well. Characters were interesting and action flowed with well-written motivation.

I'd like to see more.

Anonymous One

I liked the composition and build up of tension. It was very titilating! I would wish however that the author would do a better job of proofreading to correct the many typos and lack of needed punctuation. It would make it much more readable.

Very good first chapter. Looking forward to starting the second one now.

I've enjoyed this story but the lack of editing really does ruin it. A little more care is required.

New lines when the characters speak, remove the spelling mistakes and you're on a winner