All Comments on 'Artificialism Ch. 03'

" The sound of skidding tires and wrenching metal were brilliance to the unknown ears and omnipotent stature of Murray's vehicle. "Oh yes, tare into me, grind your steal into my frame and unleash your turret of pain for my masochistic needs." " .... LMFAO! ......................................

1) Spell checker is your friend. 2) Ask someone who possesses greater language skills than yourself to proof read your stories before submission. 3) Artificialism? What has this drivel to do with a 1920's Czech art movement? 4) Spill the beans. Who at Lit thought this ought to be inflicted on their membership?

you got someone to edit for you, Literotica has a free service to help you find beta readers who will edit your work; take advantage of it. Otherwise your writing is impossible to read.