All Comments on 'Ashley's Campaign Ch. 08'

Very nice surprise from chapter 7's ending. Also, very, very Hotttt! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Great work, better exhibition and humiliation from Sparkzone! Please keep writing more on this theme...more public humiliation, revealing outfits, getting in trouble with professors! Can't wait for the next chapter.

One of the best stories I've ever read on Lit. The earlier chapters weren't bad, but small scale incidents with small groups in private places can't compare to the extended, highly public humiliation in her school. I hope you keep slowly ramping up the exposure and humiliation in the next chapter!

What started out as a very good story has gone so far over the top it's becoming unreadable. At least at first it was believable and could have actually happened. Now she has more obscure we Hal encounters in one morning than most peoe have in a lifetime. Get it back to being believable or it will have jumped the shark. And did we really need a at by play of the entire football game? A single paragraph would have sufficed.

Just picked up on this series - great read but agree with first comment that in danger of going off track. I know there were warnings but the rape dream and nurse encounter seemed out of context for this story line - something more subtle, more 'reluctance' or 'teasing' than 'non consent' would be a better fit. But still great and more please

I don't like this. I really don't like this. First of all, it's Emily's fault for making her wear the dress commando in the first place. Readers knew what she was making Ashley do, and it was very arousing to be sure. Even the time with her completely naked with the librarian was amazing and stimulating. However, that was all ruined when the cheerleaders supporting Ellen basically lesbian raped her, and so did Nick, molesting her against her will and thinking she enjoyed it. I hope you turn this around fast, because she may be getting aroused after what happened to her, but right now she's broken, un-talkative, and seeing only blankly. Please tell me we get the teasing Ashley back, and not this husk of a girl

I wonder, when you told your readers who might get offended by the rape/dream sequence that they could skip it without missing anything important - didn't you ask yourself why you should include it at all?

I don't complain about it being brutal, I'm not offended by it, it just sticks out of the story and as you admitted yourself it doesn' t contribute to the story line. Although it finally turns out to be a dream, I'm sure you disturbed and even lost some readers there for nothing more than a rather cheap cliffhanger.

That's a pity, but overall I like your story, though I'm not sure it develops according to my tastes. I hope it stays at least a bit believable.