All Comments on 'Aspiring to be Ass-fucked Ch. 02'

You have good pacing. I find myself getting through your entries pretty quickly. Sentencing is good, as well as punctuation. Con critique? Length of entries. The easy reading makes getting through the entries seem way too short. And the endings are very good. They leave off with just enough to not piss you off, but think "Eh. Why the hell not? I'll keep an eye out for the next one."

But if you're going to keep that up, don't leave too big a time gap between entries. THAT will piss people off. :) You're doing good.