All Comments on 'At Closing Time'

Great Story

Even though I kind of saw it coming, still really enjoyed how playful she got. Good work.

Nice story! You had me going for a while to the point where I checked to make sure your story wasn't classified as Gay. Of course, that option wasn't open to Ned. This leaves the unsolved question: What do Callie's panties look like? 5* ~~ JB

I read this after seeing your comment on my "On the Job" story, and you're right. There are quite a few similarities. I guess great minds think alike. I've only read three other entries from the list, but now I'm wondering if there were any other fake robberies.

P.S. I thought it was going to be Callie from the moment she was named. Oops.

I thought this was another very well-written, fun story. My only problem, as the other commenters said, it was too easy to figure out what was going on. I knew it wasn’t a real robbery, but I was a bit hoping that it was Mrs. K, rather than Callie, having her way with our hero. That would have been a real twist!

Silly, but fun. Makes the time spent reading here a little less of a waste of time. 4*

I gotta be honest. I knew from the very beginning that it wasn't a robbery. I also figured that there was never a gun either. But you had me totally fooled with Leslie. I kept expecting it to turn out to be Callie. In my mind, she's crushing on her BFF's boyfriend and wishing that she had a piece of that.

But even though I'm totally not into the bondage thing it was a fun romp. I kept having flashbacks to the opening scene of the 1987 John Cusack movie Hot Pursuit when his girlfriend Ninjas her way into his dorm room. 4/5 I had to take away one point for the handcuffs and duct tape.

Dumb storyline!

While in high school, I did some time stocking and shipping. Never had this kind of happening.