All Comments on 'Aunt Holly Ch. 01'

I love it. The inescapable desire that the two characters have for each other is very clear. The sex is raw, graphic and detailed. The writer has a very clear image in mind

You really need to learn the basic of sentence/paragraph structure. Differences are good but most readers are creatures of habit and your presentation will be offsetting to many. Good first story, as far as your actual writing.

Thank you for your kind words, this had been my first write ever, appreciate it

I'll give the story a 4.

Of all the incest genres....the mother and son relationships seem to be the hottest. And when both the mother and the son want to make a baby, it gets hotter.

But it would be hard for me not to live as man and wife if I got my woman pregnant. It wouldn't matter if it was my mother, my sister, my cousin, or my neighbor. If I love the woman and she loves me and she is ecstatic that she is having our baby, I would have to run away with the woman and make a life elsewhere for her and I and our family.

I got my younger sister pregnant but it was easy to handle. We lived with our mother and didn't have a large family. Mom was upset but knew that the baby growing in Maria was going to be her grandchild. We moved to another state and we all lived together in the same house. Maria and I lived as husband and wife. But it couldn't have been done without our mother's help.

Great story and definitely worthy of 5 stars.

PLEASE continue with this story. You are a very gifted storyteller.

Had to stop. Too hard to read without punctuation.

This was a very good first story. Intense and I liked it.

Everything was good except his size you loose points for that

You might want to find an editor.

glad to see there will be a second round.

The horrible spelling. And omitted words made this so hard to read.

I realise the flaws, please can you all remember it’s a first write and submission

Overall a very good story, but you should definitely get an editor to fix the spelling etc. So your stories will be even better in the future