by JonThomas_
Perhaps a little too clinical? The idea is fun but there seemed to be a lack of heat to the sex. The last part let's everyone know they're enjoying it but the reader dosen't get to experience it.
think there is some editing that needs to be done.
how did darby get pregnant if leslie was being fucked?
"After several tries Darby still didn't get pregnant."
"Darby finally got pregnant."
What 'smdani4mm' opined in his/her comment. Kept getting Darby and Les cross threaded, name wise . . . .