All Comments on 'Aunt Penny Pays a Visit Ch. 01'

Please continue. I hope to see the nephew licking his aunt's butt crack soo, and both of them being weekend nudists

I know a story has to end somewhere but the cliff hanger is a little ,ore severe than i expected.

Brilliant beginning.

Thanks Harvey_32

Punctuating Dialogue

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As an FYI, when one paragraph ends with a quotation mark and the very next one starts with a mark, that indicates the character speaking has changed. When one character is speaking and is not uninterrupted by narrative or another character talking, every paragraph starts with a mark, but only the last one has a closing mark.

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For example, the paragraph where his mother is telling him Penny is coming is clearly supposed to be one person, but you wrote it as if Mom said the first, someone else said the second, and Mom said the third.

Thank you for your feedback and yes, I definitely agree with you. I will take note of this.

Two attractive adults, ample body parts, alcohol diminishing inhibitions.

Beautiful.

This story will be exciting to read.

Enterprising

Looking forward to the next chapter!

I find a tease in your story that presumes a heat continuance in the next chapter. Based on the dialogue and flow, I will venture 4 *. Hopefully that venture is not foolhardy