All Comments on 'Aurora Blue Ch. 02'

Damn, son. You're truly very good.

Very well done. I only wished that it would have ended in extreme pleasure for your wife and the character, Tim. Soreness and boorish behavior is not a turn on. Up until that point, I loved it.

ah... well this one had potential but i absolutely hate the way u ended it! whyd u do that? its like u lost your nerve or something! walked up to the precipice, looked over, and backed away wanting no part of it.

This got potential to be a good erotic story. it got fucked up in the end by his pussy mouth and his self centered streak. A wimp ass lost in his own fucked up fantasy.

Thanks for having a go it at and sharing it with us. Too much dialogue doesn't add much to the story and makes it feel choppy when reading it. Dialogue can be very effective, and you write it well, but too much of it disrupts the flow of the story.

It was neither original or clever. The dialogue must have been conceived by a teenager. The sex was neither erotic or sexy. people. The characters were really unlikeable. All-in-all a horrible attempt at story telling that was neither interesting or entertaining. 1 star.

Damnit, Odeon, this story is exciting. You tell a great story. It's fun, funny and erotic as all hell. This is what porn is supposed to do. I quit smoking years ago and now I need a cigarette.

Loved it!

As much as I despise cucks, this was simply very hot!