All Comments on 'Average Joe and The Angel'

Outstanding story!

5

I grew up on a dairy farm, so this resonated with me. Would have even liked this to be a bit longer. Thanks for sharing. And stay well in these troubled times.

It was just before I was beaten up and robbed of what little money and possessions I had, at the back of that truck stop, somewhere back along the road aways, I hadn't a clue where.

Ok, so there were no trucks until about 1970, after the interstates were made. And therefore no truck stops. At the time of your writing, most poor would have travelled by railroad passenger car - or stowed away in freight cars, more likely.

All lives matter.

Beautifully written, but totally bland--nothing actually happens. Very Sad

Gianni is in a Catch-22 - If he's "Johnny," then they're not married. If he's Gianni, he's subject to the crimes he committed.

I was worried at the beginning when she arrived late for the funeral that he HAD left Joe. I'm happy that she didn't.

The last paragraph of your notes should be carved into several thousand stone tablets and mounted at the entrance of every City/Town/Village Hall in the country.

A very interesting story but I got lost a few times with all the Joe's/Joey/Joe Jr/Joe Sr loosing potency to the tale. The jumping dates had be lost a few times until 'the end' pulled it all together. Still a 5* but should have been a 6* if not for all the confusion in names/periods. Hooyah, salute!

I enjoyed the read. Seemed well thought out. Also enjoyed your comment after the ending about your view.

both military and civilian while some may be exaggerated and others watered down from the front lines to the home fires, interesting times. TK U MLJ LV NV

Awesome story. 5*

"...All lives matter..." Just Black lives matter less, according to murder statistics.

"I can't see race..." Unless it's the White race.

"I don't see color..." Unless I think someone stole my purse. Or is driving. Or is running. Or has a toy gun.

You're on the wrong side of this issue. And you're just helping the status quo, which, I guess you're ok with.

While I enjoyed the story I am not a fan of the story being told by different people at difference time frames. But I am a fan of this author. Thanks for sharing.

Mixed feeling about this one. A lot of words describing a lot of things but very few words used creating a story. The whole thing left me feeling like I wasted my time reading which is sad as the author created a wonderful backdrop for a story that never came.

But some guys are just too good to be true.

Shouldn't commenters who post ridiculous nonsense about interstates and truck stops be led quietly away? Rubbish on social media is bad enough but here?

I'm not one of them, if someone speaks of me after I'm gone, it won't be a bed of roses. There is nothing I can do about now! Great uplifting story. Thanks ramrs

Re:dunnmovyniv’s comment

It’s sad to consider the products our liberal school systems are turning out. Here we have a person who claims there were no trucks prior to around q1970—BILLSHIT!

In the 50’s trucks were assuming a larger share of moving freight to its final destination—heck many smaller towns were not even served by a railroad. True the concept of a truck stop as we know it today hadn’t appeared, but there sure as heck were stations with yards big enough to serve trucks and my wife’s family ran a station/eatery where trucks plying the US15 N-S route regularly stopped for a bite or rent a cabin for a nap and a shower.

Also, in the time frame addressed Trailways, and Greyhound busses probably carried 80% of the poor travelers, at least in the southeast—not sure about other parts of the country, but I expect they had similar lines. (Pretty sure Greyhound would take you into the northeast—at least fellow Marines spoke of riding to NY.

Now to the purpose of comments: Spencerfiction, you have a different type of work, I read the entire thing, but the urge to skim became very powerful. Not to be picky, but just where did this story show any type of extramarital affair?

That being said you have a load of red H’s to your credit and some darn good Loving Wives scores. Thanks for the read! cd

A tough one.

This was an unusually well crafted story.

As such, a delight.

But it didn't feel like a LW story.

I know most of our highest rated LW stories

are just partly LW.

But here it was such a small part.

Just a moment in a decades spanning story.

Wouldn't it be more fitting

in Novels and Novellas?

4 out of 5 from me.

Thank you for this, really enjoyed it as a nice entertaining read. Don't know what LaneBaggins is talking about, perhaps compare this to one of his works...oh look there aren't any. Dunmovyni doesn't think the US had trucks until 1970??...still using wagons and horses I guess. Reading some of these wayward commentators makes me wonder if they know what planet they are on or what year it is.

"By 1920 there were over a million trucks on America's roads."

According to Wikipedia.

I find it cumbersome and distracting to keep referring to different narratives describing different dates in time, but all referring to the same story that obviously evolved in a seamless chronology. I guess it was a style or affect you wanted to impart, but it seemed a bit confused, or maybe just confusing to me. My bad.

The only part that was kind of signally was having to mention that it was white males who robbed her, and its was a mid-west store owner who left a pregnant woman out in the cold, for hours. I suggest you know no one from the region of which you write, nor of the normal human decency prevalent in America during that time period.

But thanks for the effort.

Story too syrupy, characters unrealistic

Great story. So many good characters and lessons to be learned. Thank you

When you switched narrators it doesn't always flow, they retell what had already been told,by themselves prior. I also doubt Joe would be allowed to.fly planes for the military,not only his age (during WWII I don't think they would let a 55 yr old act even as a ferrying pilot) but his leg,just too risky and farmers were considered essential. It is also doubtful that a black woman would be allowed to deliver aircraft either, that was done by the wasps and I believe another group called air transport command or some such, and they would not take a black woman.pilot,they treated women pilots like shit as it was, no way (I know,it is a fantasy like people in Montana accepting a black woman like that; they aren't exactly known for being friendly to any non whites.

Vis a vis trucks and truck stops: the interstate highway system was built in the 1950s (not 1970,geez) and the modern.truvk.stop came about with them. That said by the 1930s trucks already were delivering freight locally and there was a longer haul truck.indudtry, though it paled compared to what came later, rail carried most freight. It would be possible I'm theory to hitchhike. The story prob would work better had she been riding the rods (sneaking into freight trains) and getting robbed there,rather than by truckers. Hitchinking itself would be hard, cross country travel by car was pretty rare.

I liked the story itself.I guess Gianni showing up was the temptation part of the story,this it dies fit LW. It could also fit romance as well,but better here,gets more views.

I can see a lot of effort went into this but it would take more effort to read it. It seemed to drone on until I got fed up waiting for the story to start. It was a jump out go to the end and check if its worth going back to try to get into it all. It wasnt sorry.

How old are you? Have you ever read a book? How about "Grapes of Wrath"? Those poor folks moving West during the Depression in TRUCKS!. The interstate system was started by Eisenhower in the 1950s. There were highways before that like Rt 66 which was not an interstate highway. My father was a truck driver his whole life except during WWII. He was driving trucks in the 1930s. I am sad that someone actually believes there were no trucks before 1970. I worry for the future of our country sometimes.

Great set up. I was expecting a different story from the beginning. I'm glad Angel turned out to be a real Loving Wife who stayed with Joe and raised their family and didn't go with the scumbag criminal. Thank you Spencerfiction.

it was a true story.

5*

Enjoyed the whole story.

Great story and no, I see zero reminders of black lives matter in this story

But for your epiloque 4* not the colour or religion matters only the heart.

I loved your story, both for its beautifully drawn characters and your familiarity with you subject. I'm happy Angel stayed with Joe, as Gianni was nothing but a criminal and user. Great story, no need to mention BLM at all. They've long since tarnished any good reputation that they ever had.

Very good story, very enjoyable.

Appreciate and agree with your sentiments on race/equality. All lives matter. The issue is not limited to race; it’s intolerance in general. Some of the most heinous offenders, are those who portray themselves as religious - any religion other than theirs be damned! And some of the most despicable pedophiles are priests. Is there a racial component? In many cases yes, but that doesn’t justify destroying cities.

Well written 5* story with a good twist having the 'dead' husband coming back for the wife and kid. Great ending.

Somehow I have missed seeing your stories till now, this being my first. I plan to not let it be my last as I found it to be a very compelling tale and thank you for it. 5*

somewhere east of Omaha

Re: Dunmovyniv

I'm not usually one to pile on but what you insisted on about no trucks, truck stops or highways before 1970 is just too... Anyway, just how do you suppose the bootleggers transported the alcohol that was legal in Canada into the United States? By boat across the Great Lakes and in TRUCKS. It was then distributed by TRUCKS to the various cities. You might research the formation and activities of the Teamster's Union while you are eating crow. Al Capone had TRUCKS. Watch the old 'Untouchables' tv series from the late ''50's and early '60's or any of the old black and white film noir movies back from the '30's on, they had TRUCKS. Just don't believe all of the myths about Frank Nitti, that really isn't the way it was, he was really short and committed suicide. He couldn't even get it right with the first shot to the head, he needed a second try.

Great story, my only complaint as such is the Author got one thing wrong. I didn't see an 'average' person in the family, not one, but he did have me wondering why Angel had to fly in to the funeral. *****'s Signed: BTW

Can you explain why you mentioned BLM in a story that took place decades before the BLM came into existence? That made absolutely no sense to me and it took something away from your very good story.

This story was a pleasure to read. I love yarns set in a place and time with good character development. 5 stars and thanks for sharing.

Great story. Tough set of circumstances. But in the end she made the right choice. If she had gone off with Gianni, it would have been a disaster for her and her kids.

Thanks, a great look at moral, truthful hard working people. Googled Jeanette Rankin and her life was fascinating. Especially that a Congresswoman she voted for women's voting rights, but couldn't actually legally vote anywhere but Congress.

A fine story.

Fantastic story. 5 blazing nova stars!